Pome
started by RS-K 3 mnths agoFlat
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Hmm lets see...
1) It rhymes (-10)
2) It is understandable to the hoi polloi (-10)
3) It talks about foul stuff and uses foul language (+20)
4) Makes oblique references to Sex and the City (+10)
Net score 10/100
keep trying!!
1) It rhymes (-10)
2) It is understandable to the hoi polloi (-10)
3) It talks about foul stuff and uses foul language (+20)
4) Makes oblique references to Sex and the City (+10)
Net score 10/100
keep trying!!
5) Shows, not tells! (+40)
6) opening line rocks! (+10)
7) Don't hold back on words (poop, FU..say what you want to say) (-10)
8 ) Explain what aye aye means (-5)
"Explain what aye aye means (-5)"
Please replace aye aye with "YES YES YES, NOW, GAWD, YES, YES, YES, DONT STOP NOW" in your next edition...
Please replace aye aye with "YES YES YES, NOW, GAWD, YES, YES, YES, DONT STOP NOW" in your next edition...
A bus elbows a car as the cyclist whisks by
A car blows the horn as the Jay walkers fly
He blocks my way, while I push him by
In the rain filled sidewalk the dogs' poops dry
the only thought in the apple resonates high
F U 2 aye aye
But then I pass a window in the open sky
came the sound in a note too high
YES YES YES OOOOOH YES. YA YA THERE YA YA.. DON' STOP. AAAAAH.. MMMMMMM AAAH AAAH YES!! YES!!! YES!!!! MMMMMM AH AH AH MY OH MY OH MY
A car blows the horn as the Jay walkers fly
He blocks my way, while I push him by
In the rain filled sidewalk the dogs' poops dry
the only thought in the apple resonates high
F U 2 aye aye
But then I pass a window in the open sky
came the sound in a note too high
YES YES YES OOOOOH YES. YA YA THERE YA YA.. DON' STOP. AAAAAH.. MMMMMMM AAAH AAAH YES!! YES!!! YES!!!! MMMMMM AH AH AH MY OH MY OH MY
last two lines stink who wrote them ?
Could not see through the window.
Could not see through the window.
magar dono purush the ya ladkiyaan ??
in that case it would go ..is it really you ? haan ? kya ? naheen naheen ....SBS main tera khoon pee jaoongi !! bachao ! bhago !
in that case it would go ..is it really you ? haan ? kya ? naheen naheen ....SBS main tera khoon pee jaoongi !! bachao ! bhago !
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.and who named SBS judge ? grr
Still throwing boulders at me using ur over-the-shoulder-boulder-holder ?
watch me get colder
my eyes starting to smoulder
red alerts over the shoulder
as i simmer in boulder
alongside of T the builder moulder .....