If I could...
started by aa 3 mnths agoFlat
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if i could i would humpy impy.
Get some counselling....you deperately need one
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we do see others differently than self. thats where I post such.
i.e.
1. I am not the first one, but third one to use those words. designating impy as potential slut.
2. u post, thinking of self as innocent, but i dont. u see urself differently than i do. this point applies to all.
3. all u do on CH is adding to such behavior.
long enuff, or must i elaborate?
who needs help now?
1. I am not the first one, but third one to use those words. designating impy as potential slut.
2. u post, thinking of self as innocent, but i dont. u see urself differently than i do. this point applies to all.
3. all u do on CH is adding to such behavior.
long enuff, or must i elaborate?
who needs help now?
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Aa, honest critique here -
The first verse is your whole poem.The rest are cliches. I don't feel anything from the subsequent verses.
Thats maybe bcos u r desensitized !! No wonder you havent felt anything for the last 15 yrs of my trying :(
He had more to say after the first stanza. In other words he was not done. In fact his last stanza accurately and poignantly depicts his angst and his hope for a new day.
1: Can't stay here any more. Must find a way out. Must keep quiet or else I will make it worse
2: There is some attraction in staying back. But must not. since this is not my destination. I must stay strong. Else I might loose out on a better tomorrow.
3: I could leave tonight, but will be better to fly out tomorrow. Maybe I am not strong enough. Maybe I don't know the right path. Life is too dark for me to see clearly.
4: Staying back is a torture, now that I know this is not my destination. But if I could endure just this moment of darkness, tomorrow will be better.